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Scott grades Regina: Narrative

Page history last edited by PBworks 17 years ago

http://enc3310zine.pbwiki.com/MyPorfolio-Regina

 

I really enjoyed this narrative. Regina had a great beginning. Take this excerpt from her initial upload, as an example of her naturally flowing and clever construction.

 

My first feeling was that the water was too dark and too cold. But Kelli pulled me forward. Snorkeling around, we warmed to the water and the feel of our suits and flippers, we headed for our group.

In order not to kick up more murk in the water, we had to swim slowly and close to the water's surface. As a novice, this is not easy. So as I fumble toward the group I bump into a large mass, thinking it was someone from the boat I immediately look up to find a manatee staring me in the face. Not the best first impression. I was actually quite terrified and the poor guy was no better.

 

There are a few grammatical problems, but this is just good writing.

 

I wondered if her strong first draft might prevent her from accepting and incorporating new ideas (aside from grammar). This was not the case at all. Her final product represents, in my opinion, a tremendously flexible and "communally" creative effort.

 

Based on Regina's natural writing ability and her willingness to adapt and stretch herself I award her full points for her writing.

 

personal narrative - 15 points

 

Regina's adaptations of her peer's narratives also display refreshing creativity. Her approach to remixing each one varied, according to the rhetorical situation emergent in each scenario, which demonstrates her ability to listen and tune into and amplify the most efficacious means available to each principle author. For example when remixing Afram's narrative....

 

and Farrah's narrative, in particular, asked remixers to know when NOT to apply a technique for technique's sake, as her audience's requirements....

 

...these examples demonstrate an ability to adapt her revisions to best fit the work in question. Magnifico!

 

peer remixes - 5 points

 

 

Grand Total - 20 points


 

Scott, your keen observations resonate with my sense of Regina's deft handling of the assignment, but my remix of your rationale suggests ways to render our shared assessment sensible to the entire wiki. Looking good, just "follow through with your swing"

-ShareRiff

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